Outbreak, Working on a zombie story

[Jace_242]

So I've been working on a zombie story for a few months now and I've gotten enough of it written out that I'm hoping some people may be interested in taking a look at the first chunk of the story and give me advice on things they do and do not like so that I can improve the story.
In recent weeks I've had some friends read it and their advice has been really helpful, although I haven't had as much time as I would have liked to go back and change some things. I know there are some lengthy gun descriptions in there still but I promise those will be cut down considerably.

If anyone is interested in taking a look the beginning of my story Outbreak is posted here...

Jason Papke | Scribd

I'm new to the site and I'm not sure how often I'll be checking it so I'd probably see it sooner if it was sent to jason.c.papke@gmail.com

Thanks to anyone who takes the time to check it out

[Bojangles]

Cool, man. I'll check it out.

[Friday The 13th]

Dude.. hate to break it to ya... but...
There is already a movie named (Outbreak).
And it's a DAMN good movie actually.

Outbreak (1995)

[Bojangles]

Yep, true. I need to watch that movie again soon. It IS a damn good one if I remember correctly.

[Mr.Cheezle]

Outbreak. is not all about evil. It's about our souls pouring out upon the waxing moon. Only then can our hearts align with our feet. Once our alignment is okay we can join in with the rejoicing of the flying firefly.