01-23-2010, 03:36 AM
Mr. Briggs Inc. Wrote:I like the premise, truly depraved and creepy! I would however, be less straightforward with the details, not "weasel around the words" or anything, just describe things more subtley before the dude does stuff (Tell the audience more of his motivation, his thoughts on the matters and all!)
hmm maybe your right.
These shorts are just for the fun the lol.
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